Author: Ayrus2011

In Harry Potter as Neville Longbottom

ayrus2011 26 in week Our character was born Neville Longbottom in Harry Potter. His courage, his wisdom and his skills... Read more Our character was born Neville Longbottom in Harry Potter. His courage, his wisdom and his skills help him defeat Lord Voldemort and change the entire saga of Harry Potter. He is Neville the brave lion! Collapse Fanfiction, Harry Potter, Transmigration, Isekai, Male Protagonist, Weak to Strong, Modern Day, European Ambience, Alternate World, Special Abilities, Magic The cover makes me hate it even tho I love Harry Potter fanfictions I like antihero mc but this one is just...whats the word, edgy. Also author seems to based his book on other fanfic instead of cannon so the plot sounds very naive for people familar with the stroy, a few examples:SpoilerMC tricked a potion guild master with a kid juicebox dosed with veritaserum so that he'd spill his darkest secret infront of the whole diagon alley. MC was 5 year old!!!SpoilerMC invented a potion that can safely destroy soul in hocrux without destroying harming the object itself when he was in 1st grade. Something dumbledore failed to do.SpoilerMC goal in life is touture and kill every deatheater, especially Lestrange couple for harming his parents whom he met for a few days. I dont mean dont avenge them but the way he make his ultimate goal is weird seeing he is a transmigrator. The cover isn't very interesting, the story is very... how do say this...uhm naive. And the main character is very stupid and emotional,[Spoiler]When he was just born, he was instantly attached to his new parents? Come on, their should some feeling of alienation and he is very stupid. I mean promising to torture Bellatrix? The one who tortured his parents?Is suicidal, and beating up Draco Malfoy is a very naive choice. The mc didn't even consider Malfoy's father retaliating.I stopped reading at this part, since I can't stomach this very cringy, and stupid part.What I want to say to the author is you should consider rewriting the entire story. After seeing that cover i don't wanna even try it Why? It looks jolly. I don't understand why pick someone who was already in the story? If your going to write a story in the world of an already existed franchise do an OC. This story was not good to read. ExactlyBut there are so few OC HP fanfiction even on fanfiction . net This guy really really hates Harry and Ron for some reason and you can tell in the writing. It's super immature. The worst authors are the ones who can't keep there bias in check and not write the world to bash others excessively. The Worse cover pic I have seen..... Why add something that was last updated a month ago?